Thursday, July 15, 2010

*Purchasing the lastest mobile phones and other electronic luxuries*

In this era of science and technology,students are becoming more concerned about acquiring the latest gadgets.It is a usual phenomenon to see students being very concerned with purchasing the latest mobile phones and other electronic luxuries.One day,I saw a girl beside the toilet and she was showing off her latest mobile phone to her dear friends.She said her latest mobile phone has many functions such as 3G and internet.Nowadays,students are being very concerned with purchasing the latest mobile phones and other electronic luxuries.Besides,they waste their money to buy latest mobile phones and other electronic luxuries in their life.In my opinion,I think that to purchase the latest mobile phones and other luxuries are wasting of money,affecting their studies and producing sosial problems.
First,I would like to highlight that purchasing the latest mobile phones and other electronic luxuries are a waste of money.This is because,when the markets have new or latest mobile phones and other electronic luxuries,they will use their money to buy them.If the students lack of money to buy the latest electronic and they will try to cheat their parents to give money to them.After that,they will use that money to buy whatever latest electronic they like.On the other hand,if they have the latest mobile phones,they will show off to their friends and let their friends know she has new or latest mobile phones.This will make other friends steal her latest mobile phones.Therefore,students purchase the latest mobile phones and other electronic luxuries are wasting their money.
Second,students purchase the latest mobile phones and other electronic luxuries will affect their studies in school.This is because they will bring their latest mobile phones to school and let their friends see.If a teacher is teaching in front of the students,the students will not care about what the teacher is teaching and they only use their latest mobile phones to chat with friends or take pictures.Besides that,they also use their latest mobile phones to go online,because nowadays the latest mobile phones are equipped with internet such as i-phone and you can be online anytime and anywhere.So,students will not concentrate on the teacher's teaching and they cannot answer the questions for exam is coming.In brief,affecting their studies is one of the points that I want to highlight.
Third,the point of the students purchasing the latest mobile phones and other electronic luxuries that I would highlight is creating more sosial problems such as gangsterism and robbery.If the student does not have money to buy luxury or latest electronic,they will try to borrow money from their bad friends like gangster.After,the bad friend will bring them go clubbing,meet some 'Ah Loong' and teach them to try some drugs.This will let brighter students become a bad future in his life.After that,the sosial problem will become worse and uglier.Thus,students purchase the latest mobile phones and other electronic will create more sosial problems.
In conclusion,students are being very concerned with purchasing the latest mobile phones and other electronic luxuries will bring a lot of problems in this era such as wasting money,affecting their studies and creating more sosial problems.Hence,parents should spend more time to take care their children to the fullest.In addition,schools should also not allow students to bring latest mobile phones and other electronic luxuries to school.

3 comments:

Lonely_Wolf said...

Overall your essay is ok~~
However, there are sort of many errors every here and there. Its negligible.

But there's 1 sentence totally wrong and it bothers me a lot.

The "This will let brighter students become a bad future in his life." Its all wrong~~~
The right one is,
"This will cause the Students to have a bad future."

nunaism said...

thanks for the essay : )

Unknown said...

it will be great if you put idioms in your essay..

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